it has originality but not enough club details
Visited: Monday Afternoon Dancers: 1-5 $ Spent: $300-$500 Lespwa Fè Viv How lucky was I? To focus my time Scant else to clutter the mind
But finding a muse Before beer no 2? Then moving like somehow she knew
Well, that’s quite close being The darn sweetest thing even A fumbling fool could adore (And the impression could not be ignored)
No doubt, you made me feel All sorts of things But more important’ly… …to stop when life just wants you to be And say Lespwa Fè Viv
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Reject.
Probably best as discussion on the club’s page.
Reject. I suggested they try to shape it up as an article.
It’s not a traditional review - so I would reject it.
It is creative and interesting - and likely best posted on the club comments area.
I hit reject on it
I’m here to know if I can get in a dancers g-string, not to read a poem about her! Lol
First poem review I've seen; needed just a few more club details and pricing and it would be a Yes from this judge.
No details, no publish.
No.
Creative, but not a review. No.
I find it entertaining, so I would approve. What is the harm?
A review needs to include details. Descriptions of the dancers, the environment. The pricing, and most importantly the mileage. Was it just a regular grinding lapdance with boob and ass grabbing? Or were you able to smack her pussy and plunge a buttplug in and out of her asshole
Flush.
Writing a few lines in verse is easy, but writing something that stays in meter, rhymes, AND actually tells an interesting story is much more difficult.
i'd say approve it. the guy did claim to spend between $300-500. like to know which club it was and get a chance to maybe even ask a question or two. who knows - maybe get a reply that's just as poetic as above?
Nah.
When I read it in the Unpublished list my thought was that he was just writing something long-enough to get approved and he had actually not gone to a club .
Is it still there? Would've thought it'd be settled by now one way or the other.
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