The real deal on THE BARE DEN

Adjudicator notes

• ElectronmanApproved·This review is acceptable to me. But it could be better with a little more critical self-evaluation and some careful editing. Ask yourself, what is missing? How about a description of the typical talent. Is there a stage show? If so, is it topless/nude? How about a description of the private dance facilities and mileage (you only reported costs). Also, I suspect that your last review was not "removed" as in published but then taken down. It was probably rejected. This is a trivial error but it is one indicator that you might think more carefully about how and what you write. Proof read for grammatical errors.